Submitting Rough Draft

I have now put together a rough draft of my 7 minute radio documentary, 'Going Gender Free', which I have sent off for feedback.

Once I edited all the clips I wanted to use I tried to structure them in a narrative on my editing timeline, which helped when I wrote my voice over. The structure I followed was:

Intro: short clips from each interview and introduction to documentary

Part 1: clips from case studies explaining why and how they raise their children gender neutral

Part 2: criticisms of gender neutrality and expert perspective from psychologist

Conclusion: concerns about the future from interviewees

For my introduction I chose to structure it using short clips, around 10 seconds long, from each interviewee to give a preview to the listener of what they are going to hear from then. I then concluded with a clip from Alex, my main case study, where he describes his concerns for the future as I thought this would be a good way to round it off.

Update: Feedback

I have now received feedback from my tutor for my documentary.

In terms of strengths:

• Alex is a strong interview and engaging talker

• clips are engaging

In terms of areas that I need to improve:

• add some music at the beginning and end

• tighten up introduction clips and make them 6-7 seconds long

• in the opening voice over when I want to find out 'who the parents are bringing their children up gender neutral, broaden this out so include 'why' and 'how'

• if possible add in another side to the argument so find someone to interview who is critical of gender neutral parenting

• if possible record voice over in a studio rather than with microphone